Aww, I know it doesn't help too much but I like it!
What is it that you don't like about it? I'm not great at drawing dreamers either but maybe I could give some advice if you wanted?

i really like these though!! :O

roughly what bothers you/gives you the most trouble when drawing dreamers? im still working on how i draw them myself (trying to make them a little more accurate to how shadow draws them) but i have some stuff kinda right i think.
(i mainly use deer for ref on anatomy)

in this wip here there are 3 things that stand out to me as being a little off, 2 are on the full body shot on the right:

mizu's neck is a bit thick, as thick as (or very slightly thicker) than her body.

and her legs are short (almost everybody has had this problem when drawing a dreamer though i think, stupid tiny canvases >:^( )

the other thing is on the left bust, mizu's chin is a little off-- this one is kinda hard to explain cause my brain's not coming up with words for it. it's like... the shape of her chin doesnt match the shape of the guard over her nose? her nose area looks like it has the proper dimensions but her chin doesnt and her chin looks more like a side profile view than a 3/4s one.

outtaspace*

aside from those things i think this looks nice, you actually draw good dreamers, that one pic of starlight that you did (the "multiple drawings of her in one pic") is something i occasionally go back to look at cause i love it lol.