Shower Temperature by Jon Corp Productions
This was an experiment in both art and dialogue. I've been trying to find a way to make my "Johnny Style" (what I call my cartoony drawings) look more...pleasant to the eye. Except for that last panel. That one's ugly on purpose.
So, I guess I'll see how many people agree with the shower on the dialogue. Well anyway, have a nice day!
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29 Mar, 2016, 5:09 pm
rip shower water
29 Mar, 2016, 6:26 pm
I've had this a few times, mainly for cold. xD
panel 2's facial design is actually pretty good, Jon! and even Panel 4 xD
29 Mar, 2016, 7:28 pm
Hate it when that happens. xD
29 Mar, 2016, 8:53 pm
It happens frequently tbh XD
29 Mar, 2016, 10:27 pm
Yeah. I've had those unexpected moments with showers... X )
30 Mar, 2016, 5:42 pm
re: Well, to improve the other ones? I think eye placement is a key. Panel 1/3's eyes are a bit too close to each other, while p2's is just right I think, and it's facial structure is pretty good, the cheek-to-chin shape is pretty good, but the prior and former's is too flat, unless that's your general cartoon style, (which I have my "comic style" with flat cheek-chin) but for a more human-like cartoon, p2's is much closer.
P2's arms could be a bit thicker, and his(your?) shoulder could blend with the arm's motion, because the shoulder should move with the arm.
Also, the ear could be closer to the face, it seems a bit far to the back of the head. If your head was facing completely left/right, the ear would be about the middle, so when your head is at an angle, the ear should angle accordingly. This is exempt if you're going for a comic/toon style, where ears are often goofy or misplaced anyway (like Jon's in Garfield)
xD Jon and Jon xD
Hope this helps?
31 Mar, 2016, 5:33 am
"It burns!"
Oh, man. I feel his pain. Nice comic!
:D