Yep by EWSpirit

I need your opinions on my comic. Ways I can improve, what you like, ideas, ect.
Also, tell me how much you enjoy the comic. Tell me if I should continue, or if I should stop.
#Aqualeaf

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painted on a Nintendo 3DS
16 Nov, 2014, 1:27 am
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FadingGlory

16 Nov, 2014, 3:51 am

Hmm, I've tried thinking of a few things you could change, but I've got nothing XD Your story is amazing, exciting, mysterious, and magical, all in one! >u<

Oh, but one thing: who is the main main character? If there is a main main character, you would need to center everything on her. Like maybe told from her point of view, or just showing her importance and how everyone cares about her. I don't know, I've never written a story before! XP
From what I have seen, the older siblings have had a lot more moments than Rain, so Rain to me seems more like a background character. I don't know how far into the story you are, but if everything so far is only like an introduction, then maybe Rain could become the very center of the story after everything is set. Ehh, none of my words are making any sense to me, I think I'll retry tomorrow morning XD
Keep up the awesome work! :D

FadingGlory

16 Nov, 2014, 3:52 am

Oops, not Rain, Aqua! Silly me XD

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