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Rain hailed down from the ever dark clouds, pounding against Banes fur as she ran. The ice cold water felt like blades as it hit her raw, heavily bleeding skin. Every bone in the wolf's body ached with an unbearable pain, but she kept running. It had only been moments since Sarah.... Bane shook her head, refusing to think about what had just happened. As the young wolf ran against the pounding rain and wind she looked up at the sky. Tears blotted the little vision the rain allowed her, making the few stars that shone between the gaps of clouds seem blotchy and sad. It hurt to strain her neck so, but the brown wolf refused to look anywhere but the sky as she ran on. /They must not find me. Not ever.... I have to find Tanner, he'll know what to do./ and Banes colourful eyes spilled with tears now at the thought of him, she thought her heart might break from the sorrow it caused.
As she ran, Bane neglected to notice a large stone that jutted out of the ground until it sliced into her front paw, pain shot through her leg and suddenly she was head first into the soggy cold grass.

Winded and hurt Bane attempted to get up, crawling at first, trying to grimace through all the pain and agony, determined to keep moving. Eventually, getting onto her shaky feet she stood for a minute, her legs held for a short moment, then gave out and she fell make down. This time, Bane didn't get up, didn't even move. The torturous pain that was shooting through her body was something words could never describe. So she lay there, her breath turning hoa,rse and ragged as a cold sweat broke out and the blood from her numerous gashes, cuts, and wounds continued to endlessly soak her fur and the sorrounding grass.

And then, as she lay there, the real storm started up. Rain shot down like bullets from the black sky, a bolt of lightning raced down to the ground with a crack, illuminating the eerie black lands and the pain began to intensify even more, the wolf was scre aming with all her ragged voice could muster, it curtled and echoed through the empty lands. She couldn't keep going like this, no, this was too much, the sheer agony was something worse than any death. It tore at the young wolf and desperatly, she searched around for.... something, anything, maybe a sharp stone to cut her throat. Anything would be better then this searing, horrible, convulsing pain. She tried to turn over and look but the wolf's body seized up and Bane was immobilized, even her mouth was forced shut. So she sat there, tears pouring out of her eyes and blooding pooling out of seemingly every point of her body, inside she was scre aming for mercy... but nothing came.

Lightning flashed again. Once. Twice. Then the world was spinning. A tree branch snspped but it seemed to keep coming back on the tree then off again, like she was going back in time every two seconds. Thunder rumbled and shook the Earth sounding like rough, dark laughter, but it cut out every few seconds. Bane could see the grass around her, it seemed to grow, and grow, closer and more distorted and then sha,tter like glass. Lightning flashed a third time and the whole world broke into a million shards, leaving only the earsplitting sound of breaking and scre aming.... But this time it wasnt Banes. She watched, still sprwaled on the ground as the last shards of her world fell, replaced by cold, stone walls.

-end-

wow... poor bane...
I almost forgot about this story!

Wow... that was intense to read. You are the best at writing, no one else compares

O_o That's a shocking, yet good story!

o.o
this story is so amazing