The END by MacsTwist
Ep 1 of the series hope you enjoy!!
Im slow :l so just wait for the end ! xD
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31 Aug, 2013, 1:22 am
AAGH, I woke up, I had a nightmare I was in the end, like I was an Enderman or something.
I looked out the window
31 Aug, 2013, 1:24 am
It was 2 AM, I should try and sleep,
But I could not for the life of me fall asleep
31 Aug, 2013, 1:25 am
I guess I should go mining or something, "Wait what?"
Why is that enderman just standing there staring at me
31 Aug, 2013, 1:28 am
Thats creepy, I shook it off and went outside, 1st thing I get attacked by the enderman,
It bit me and started choking me,
I stabbed it with my iron sword and I sta.bbed it and the ender pearl fell in my mouth
31 Aug, 2013, 1:30 am
EEEW I instantly spit it out,
Gosh I feel light headed I should lay down,
It feels like... THE PEARL what, is it staring at me? I went inside and cooked up some mushroom soup,
I turned around.
AAAGGGH!
31 Aug, 2013, 1:32 am
The pearl went inside me or something, wierd I should lay down, This was all mostly a dream I bet
I fell asleep
31 Aug, 2013, 1:33 am
I woke up very sick so stayed home and rest
END OF PART 1
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31 Aug, 2013, 1:55 am
epic! cant wait for next part!
31 Aug, 2013, 2:44 am
cool
31 Aug, 2013, 11:07 am
xD COOL PEOPLE LIKE STARING AT YOU LOL
31 Aug, 2013, 3:00 pm
It's a nice plot I can tell, but slow it down a little ^ ^'' give it more detail, make your readers feel like they can actually see the story. If you slow it down a little it makes it more interesting, for example,
"I looked across the land, seeing an enderman I paniced. I looked at him straight in the eyes willing to battle him."
Yeah. I'm sorry if this didn't help.